Neck pain

Paparoksguitar · 02-06-2010, 05:37 PM

The sun was hitting my room perfectly. So i did a quick portrait. Wanted to a shot like this for awhile.

Sry for the bad cutout, i didnt really like my bed as a backdrop and i was lacking in posterboard at the time..

Paparoksguitar · 02-07-2010, 10:06 AM

soo, not one comment? Really? I actually thought i did well this time too...

Timothy · 02-07-2010, 06:27 PM

it seems like there are a few highlights blown out, on the arm and on the neck of the shirt, with a diffuser of some sort it might have been able to spread the light a bit more evenly, which would look nice, even if it's just a white sheet ove the window or a frosted shower screen.

also with the face it just seems a bit oddas there is the bright light comming from camera right and then on the subjects left eye it's in shadow but the cheeck below it is lit.... just looks odd to me.

but keep up the work and keep practicing

AnotherNewGuy · 02-07-2010, 06:37 PM

A male should not lean there head to the low shoulder.

Angle is unflattering.

Face is underexposed.

Pose isn't attractive.

This is my honest opinion, and I am not trying to be mean. Just give you stuff to hopefully build off of.

IgsEMT · 02-07-2010, 06:57 PM

Quote:

A male should not lean there head to the low shoulder.

Angle is unflattering.

Face is underexposed.

Pose isn't attractive.

This is my honest opinion, and I am not trying to be mean. Just give you stuff to hopefully build off of.

to add...
Not sure what you mean by "Wanted to a shot like this for awhile." but if this were film, I'd say it is a waste of frame.
The good news, is now you have an idea of what not to do so you can only improve

Paparoksguitar · 02-07-2010, 09:34 PM

Thank you guys. I appreciated the honest cnc. I didn't even fully realize it before but you are completely correct that the face is under exposed, i should have focused more on it.

I understand exactly what you are saying on all of them your crits, maybe next time i'll get it right. Thanks guys

niforpix · 02-08-2010, 02:07 AM

Quote: Originally Posted by AnotherNewGuy

A male should not lean there head to the low shoulder.

Their, not there...

AnotherNewGuy · 02-08-2010, 08:05 AM

right, thanks.

02-06-2010, 05:37 PM	#1
Paparoksguitar Been spending a lot of time on here! Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 158 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post My Gallery: (0)	Neck pain The sun was hitting my room perfectly. So i did a quick portrait. Wanted to a shot like this for awhile. Sry for the bad cutout, i didnt really like my bed as a backdrop and i was lacking in posterboard at the time..

02-07-2010, 06:37 PM	#4
AnotherNewGuy Been spending a lot of time on here! Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: SW FL Posts: 249 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts My Gallery: (0)	A male should not lean there head to the low shoulder. Angle is unflattering. Face is underexposed. Pose isn't attractive. This is my honest opinion, and I am not trying to be mean. Just give you stuff to hopefully build off of. __________________ Nikon D300s SB600 ELITEPHOTOGRAPHICS.NET

02-07-2010, 06:57 PM	#5
IgsEMT TPF Junkie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: NYC Posts: 1,354 My Photos Are NOT OK to Edit Thanked 62 Times in 60 Posts My Gallery: (0)	Quote: A male should not lean there head to the low shoulder. Angle is unflattering. Face is underexposed. Pose isn't attractive. This is my honest opinion, and I am not trying to be mean. Just give you stuff to hopefully build off of. to add... Not sure what you mean by "Wanted to a shot like this for awhile." but if this were film, I'd say it is a waste of frame. The good news, is now you have an idea of what not to do so you can only improve __________________ ************************************************** ברוך השם

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AnotherNewGuy Been spending a lot of time on here! Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: SW FL Posts: 249 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts My Gallery: (0)	right, thanks. __________________ Nikon D300s SB600 ELITEPHOTOGRAPHICS.NET

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02-07-2010, 10:06 AM	#2
Paparoksguitar Been spending a lot of time on here! Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 158 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post My Gallery: (0)	soo, not one comment? Really? I actually thought i did well this time too...

02-07-2010, 06:27 PM	#3
Timothy No longer a newbie, moving up! Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Queensland, Brisbane, Australia Posts: 70 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post My Gallery: (0)	it seems like there are a few highlights blown out, on the arm and on the neck of the shirt, with a diffuser of some sort it might have been able to spread the light a bit more evenly, which would look nice, even if it's just a white sheet ove the window or a frosted shower screen. also with the face it just seems a bit oddas there is the bright light comming from camera right and then on the subjects left eye it's in shadow but the cheeck below it is lit.... just looks odd to me. but keep up the work and keep practicing

02-07-2010, 09:34 PM	#6
Paparoksguitar Been spending a lot of time on here! Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 158 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post My Gallery: (0)	Thank you guys. I appreciated the honest cnc. I didn't even fully realize it before but you are completely correct that the face is under exposed, i should have focused more on it. I understand exactly what you are saying on all of them your crits, maybe next time i'll get it right. Thanks guys

02-08-2010, 02:07 AM	#7
niforpix I spend too much of my life on TPF! Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 473 My Photos Are OK to Edit Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts My Gallery: (0)	Quote: Originally Posted by AnotherNewGuy A male should not lean there head to the low shoulder. Their, not there...

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