A Portrait Of Sorts

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  1. Alpha

    Alpha Troll Extraordinaire

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    Full frame 645 chrome. Provia 100F. This was not a wedding shot. Yes, she actually is that tan.
     
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    terri Administrator Staff Member Supporting Member

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    You got very nice skin tones with that Provia. Nice!

    I'd have been tempted to play with the DOF here - I appreciate this is about that face, but my eye travels naturally down the line and I would have liked seeing more of the gown in focus. But that's personal preference, not exactly a fault with the image.
     
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    I know what you mean. This was toward the end of the day when the sun was a little lower. Although we'd swapped her wardrobe a number of times, I'd gotten my fill of shooting that dress. The whole strip looks really nice, and I did bracket the DOF across at least three exposures. Given the angle, I felt that the shorter DOF fit well. This one in particular, where everything from the breast-up was sharp just jumped out at me. Though her expressions were good in the other shots, I also felt like this particular one was the best. So in any event I was/would have been willing to sacrifice a slightly deeper DOF for that particular face. Also, there wasn't much I could do to control the lighting here (though it ended up working out pretty nicely). There was no way to shield the incoming light, and trying to fill from her left hand side would have flattened the image way too much. It is a shame though, because all of the best detail in the dress is in that frilly bit that ended up getting a bit blown out (It's probably extra blown out due to the scan. I'd have to double check the slide to see what detail, if any, is there).
     
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    ok here it goes - I like the pose. It looks very natural. Her smile is not forced. She looks comnfortable in front of the camera. I like the softness and the lightning is very nice. The only thing that bothers me is the hotspot thats on her forehead at the hairline.

    ! I love this picture though.

    I am not a professional critiquer..(if thats a word) I know what I like and thats it !
     
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    Regarding those hot spots: I am willing to bet the slide itself has much better information than this scan is giving up. I've yet to scan any transparency that doesn't burn a delicate highlight - my fault, because I'm a terrible scanner.
     
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    i love this shot. the dress is a tad blown but its expression thats great. i would also like a really tight crop on just her face that smile is wonderful.

    nice to see you post a pic max.:wink::p
     
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    The major problem I have with the pose is that it seems to emphasize a rather prominent chin and a long neck. The eyes are also not sufficiently bright and sharp to take the viewer's attention away from the chin and neck either.

    skieur
     
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    Perhaps there could have been a bit more light on the left side of her face, but I'm failing to see such an egregious posture problem. I think the pose is rather lovely.
     
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    so do i max. has she seen the pic yet
     
  10. JerryPH

    JerryPH No longer a newbie, moving up!

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    Since in the near future I plan to take a little constructive criticism, I may as well learn to share my thoughts, if I may.

    First off, honestly, anything anyone could say would be truly nit-picking, the pic is awesome, period.

    Having said that:

    - I would have liked to see less of a shine on the top of her face, and a little more highlighted detail on the shaded side.

    - The eyes don't really pop out at me, the whites are not clearly visible.

    - An increase in aperture to decrease bokeh a little further down, perhaps starting at the waist instead of starting at around mid-breast would be more pleasant. Hands and fingers unblurred are always attractive in the position she has placed them.

    - The dress around the breast area seems a touch blownout?

    - I love hair... and the colours of her hair is awesome, I find myself wanting to see more of the section thats cropped out on the right side... nothing asthetic, purely personal taste.

    Now I am no pro, so please accept my thoughts as those of a beginner. :)
     
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    Fun shot!!! Excellent camera work. Not sure how she can be comfortable laying on a brick wall, but she is or at least looks like it. Although I do not like seeing teeth I have to say she has a killer smile.

    Love & Bass
     

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