another portrait for critique

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  1. anton980

    anton980 TPF Noob!

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    Hi again, everyone! Here's another portrait I shot last night. It's modified in photoshop some. The blotchiness on the skin is due to compression. I wanted to keep the image size large, so I had to bring down the quality.
    I'd love to hear comments! Thanks very much for looking!

    [​IMG]

    Anton
     
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    This image seems to be way soft and out of focus. I think if her left side wasn't cropped so tight that would help too. The lighting needs some work as well...but the most distracting part is that none of it is focused.
     
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    i agree. btw, how long did you make her hold that vase? :shock:
     
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    Hi and thanks for posts. The vase isnt too heavy :) And the session wasnt long either. About the focus - I did soften the image both to achieve a soft look and to minimize the noise. Her face is in focus, but I agree, it does look odd here, could be image quality.

    Any more ideas about the crop? I thought this one was good..
     
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    chroix In Latin it's "spikius conius thingonius"

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    looks soft again. not white balanced. I always try to make sure the eyes are in focus and sharp. I really like the subject and composition. The models expression and pose make the pic interesting even though there are some technical probs.
     
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    I agree about the focus and the crop, it looks like she is leaning on the edge of the frame, good subject though.
     
  7. anton980

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    Thanks to everyone for comments and critiques! I am very positive that the face is in focus. I did soften the image a lot, maybe that throws it off? Anyways, I've reworked it a little bit, here's an updated version, slightly larger and at better quality. Thanks for looking!

    [​IMG]
     
  8. Nikon Fan

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    It still doesn't look at all focused to me...not even the face. Maybe it's the softening, but it still shouldn't be that blurry. The shadown cast on her face is discomforting, you might try shooting again and switch up the lighting a bit.
     
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    The re-worked version is better. I have several suggestions though. First, the clothing is out of key with the background. The direction of the eyes doesn't serve the rest of the posing. It makes me wonder WHAT is she LOOKING at?! But what causes me the most concern is the shadow you prop cast across her face. In fact, the prop is so large, I'm wondering a bit if she's the prop and the vase is the subject.

    I do like soft focus. Before digital and for more than two decades, I ALWAYS had a diffuser in front of my lens for portraits, except maybe some groups. I think you can get the results you want. I'm getting close to it myself, but I'm sure there's a better way. I'd be glad to share my approach with you.

    Pretty model! Good idea too.

    -Pete
     
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    Thanks again for comments! I'll definately keep all you've suggested in mind and will try to reshoot this particular one.

    Pete, whatever tips you're willing to share will be of great benefit. It's always good to know other people's approach.

    In the meantime, I will try to invest in better lighting. This one was done with whatever I had available in my apartment.

    Thanks again, guys!

    Anton
     
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    the focus issue has already been beaten to death. I just wanted to add that I think there's too much flower and not enough person.
     
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    Like the look on her face. the eyes VERY good show.
    I do agree the focus seems a little out. but keep working.
     

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