another 'taking it in'

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  1. JonMikal

    JonMikal TPF Noob!

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    how do you feel about this one. at first, i couldn't tell if the guy was sleeping or thinking...i found out shortly after. he was studying a piece on the wall to my right and had held that pose forever it seemed...he was definately into art this day. i dropped low for this one to get a slightly different perspective.

    shot with a D70 - existing light - rested camera on top of camera bag. i know that dang barrel look is present again, but i wanted to include as much art work as possible to get a feel of the room.


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    The low angle works so well here, and the conversion is swoon worthy as usual. I know you're an in camera cropper, but that little bit of painting that is cut off on the left and creeping in on the right bothers me a little.
     
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    so crop equally on both sides or just crop the right pic frame out? i wanted to keep the sitter centered.
     
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    You could do either, though if you did equally, I think it would make the picture on the left sem a bit more natural. Either way, I'm having more and more trouble looking away from that man. :)
     
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    I like the composition. And it catches my interest. It makes me feel like I actually in the room.
     
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    I would agree about the crop, but say just do the right side. Otherwise I really like this image...there seems to be some distortion you are getting and I'm not sure why but it makes it kind of cool looking :) The conversion is perfect and I think you really captured something nice here Jon :)
     
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    Nice pic

    just loose the little bit of frame on the right.

    don't know how you feel about PS - I would have just cloned it out.

    Hanno
     
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    I have to agree with those above, but specifically with ThatCameraThingy. If you have ps, clone out that right frame. Otherwise don't touch this one. I like the "barrel" look and I also really enjoy the subject. It reminds me somewhat of Ferris Buellers Day Off when they look at Sunday on la grande jatte by Suerat.
     
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    the angle and composition is done quite well. As for the right frame, I do find it a little annoying, however the trim on the wall adds to the character of the room significantly. I am not a big fan of using PS to clone out things in images (takes out some of the art of shooting), however in this case I might make an exception if it were me.
     
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    thanks all. here's the edited version. seems with the little bit of frame missing it looks unbalanced.

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    Perfect, now my attention is firmly on the subject. :)
     
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    this does feel a little off balance now. My eyes also seem to be drawn away from the subject now and towards the empty space. Then again that could be caused by the fact I know what was changed.
     

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