composition query

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  1. The_Traveler

    The_Traveler Completely Counter-dependent Supporting Member

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    What about the walk sign in the center.
    Is this composition too complicated?

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    Don't edit this one, please.
     
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    its very busy IMHO. The cut off security camera, the other round (hexigonal?) thing bothers me too. Also the faded stickers on the light post. I dont like this one.

    The subject is the cross walk man. I just dont feel drawn to it. I was thinking maybe a tighter crop, but even then I just dont feel anything for this one.

    What I DO like is the green on that door, looks to be exposed well for its color.
     
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    I don't think this is a fair case to judge composition, because the short answer is that the composition is no good, but the real problem is that I don't think a different composition or crop would make the photo any better.
     
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    Read up on the rule of thirds.
     
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    Why did you even take this?
     
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    The_Traveler Completely Counter-dependent Supporting Member

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    Just out of curiousity.
    Why did this picture draw responses only from viewers who post pictures rarely or never themselves? Is this a cultural phenomenon I'm not aware of?
     
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    I can't answer your question in your previous post, as why people post and don't post can really only be deterimined by themselves. However, I think a tighter crop at the top, and a more of the green would help. I envision it as a landscape format with the crosswalk sign being in the top right "rule-of-thirds" point.
     
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    I like this photo. When you look at the crosswalk sign the door behind it seems to have a soft glow to it. And the same green is reflected in the light itself as if its showing through.
    And I think your 3rds are there. I only wish there were more advertisements on the post.
     
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    I've posted pictures before...in recent history, in fact. Sorry you missed them. Doesn't change the fact that your composition is uninteresting.

    Edit: And for the record, I tried to post some of my real work in the critique forum last weekend, so that you could all try to poke holes in it. But the mods won't let me. I'm not permitted to post photos for critique that I'm already satisfied with, because I don't have any question about them.
     
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    I can't say I'm a fan of the shot as it is now...I can see it as a tight horizontal crop...just focusing on the green door and the walk sign. I see you mentioned not to post edits...I'd be more than happy to PM an example of what I mean if you're curious...though it probably isn't necessary. I could see this working as a part of a series..but I'm not sure how it stands alone.

    It's nice to see even the talented have queries from time to time :sillysmi:
     
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    wow..what a great critique, its nice to have children visiting the forums.

    i find some of the members here to be complete ass hats.:er:


    as for this picture, i wonder how a wider shot would have looked, im more interested in the green door then the crosswalk man.
     
  12. (Ghastly) Krueger

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    Regarding the image: like others have said, yes it seems to be a bit comlicated. Loosing the top would help for sure. I would crop out te post, leaving only the walk sign over the green door.

    Regarding the other topic: I can only speak for myself. I saw your image, thought about it and to be honest didn't feel competent to judge it, so I kept quiet and left the thread. As an afterthought, I decided I can also learn from giving my opinion and came back, only to read the answers before yours and wonder for a while.

    I cannot say why people post borderline offensive messages but fail to show any work themselves.

    You raise an intersting point and have produced a good example.
     

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