Couple of poems.

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  1. sonny.

    sonny. TPF Noob!

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    Heres a couple of poems i wrote. Criticism welcomed

    Here me,
    all the time,
    all around
    everywhere one can be,
    sitting in the serene park
    or
    in the car with the bass thump.

    Here me,
    satisfy you,
    please you,
    appease you.
    Not there to hurt.
    Crank up the tunes,
    only a
    quick whirl of a thumb
    or
    perhaps taking th needle to the disc
    rather than than the unthinkable
    and
    lose yourself.

    With all this,
    I have not a speech to speak,
    but rather
    Speak free.



    Drip
    Drop
    Vision
    through the
    clear glass

    Invision
    the blueandgray

    enclosed eye
    till the green rushes by.
     
  2. Antarctican

    Antarctican TPF Noob!

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    :clap:

    Welcome to the forum. Nice first post. I look forward to seeing more of your posts.
     
  3. mdcrisp2000

    mdcrisp2000 TPF Noob!

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    I don't usually like poetry, so the fact I enjoyed yours can be taken as a huge compliment :sexywink:

    Nice work
     

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