Crayola

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  1. Bruno

    Bruno TPF Noob!

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    This is one of my early works. Any feedback is welcome. Thank you in advance.

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  2. Bruno

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    Anyone?
     
  3. Big Mike

    Big Mike I am Big, I am Mike Staff Member Supporting Member

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    I took a long look at it...but I couldn't think of anything to say. I like it...

    It could be sharper, it's a little soft.
     
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    I guess the reason why it looks a little soft is because I didn't have much space to get a good angle. From what I can see, the left side of the photograph is a little soft, the rest is ok. I'll try to fix it if I can. Thanks for the feedback.
     
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    Contrast could use a boost, which is one reason it looks soft. Use the levels tool to get closer to a true black and a true white, then use the curves tool if you need to tweak the mid-ranges. This should also help get a more vibrant color.

    Interesting image. Are they in a display case? Are the partial crayons reflections?
     
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    I agree with the others. The picture is rather soft and a boost in color saturation would really help this picture. What you also might want to try is try rotating it counter clockwise. It look rather interesting when I turned my head sideways. Anyway, it's just a suggestion. I do like the effect you were going for.
     
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    Agree with the above. Since they are crayons, I think it would be cool if the colors were really vibrant and sharp.

    What's trippy about this is the arrangement. Since it didn't all fit on my screen, I was pulling the scroll bar up and down to see it all and it makes it look like the crayons are moving. It was weird and cool.
     
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    i just tried it with the scroll button on the mouse- you're right: it's intense :drunk:
     
  9. ksmattfish

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    Interesting image. As with the others, more contrast and sharpness. Is the softness on the left side a DOF issue? It seems like the crayons in the center are sharper. I think I probably would have been tempted to tilt the image more to get diagonals.
     
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    Interesting. Looks like rounds in a belt-feed machine gun to me. :D
     

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