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  1. DanaLane

    DanaLane TPF Noob!

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    I know her face is a little dark and I need to mask and brighten it a tad, but looking for some constructive criticism of the following;

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    Looking for suggestions on how I could improve the next time.

    Thanks!
    Model: Monica
     
  2. Big Mike

    Big Mike I am Big, I am Mike Staff Member Supporting Member

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    Her face could maybe use a touch more light, but it's certainly not too dark.

    I really like the image, it's a very engaging portrait. The only thing I don't like is the position of her hands & forearms...they look a bit awkward.
     
  3. The Phototron

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    I don't like the square crop.
     
  4. heip

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    I think the face is lit fine, the eyes need a little more punch. Very nice portrait.
    IMO I like the square crop on this. I dodged the eyes to bring up the catch lights.

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    The_Traveler Completely Counter-dependent Supporting Member

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    First of all this is a super shot and it has so much going for it that I can hardly list it.
    Great pose, model, color, pose, etc. The contrast between beautiful skin, hat texture and wall texture is just perfect. As is her smile.

    IMO, there are two small problems, both correctable.
    1) the face is a little dark and dull; I would specifically lift that up a little and increase contrast a smidge
    2) the position of the hands are awkward and forces a crop that includes two dark corners at the top which diffuses the energy of the picture a lot.

    I would crop this just to her shoulders and head for a tighter and more pleasing (at least to me) shot. Sort of like this below.

    Thanks for letting me play with this really nice shot.

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    That's a great crop traveler, and nice adjustments as well.
     
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    I like heip's eye adjustments and The Traveller's crop. But I love the original color you have, I wouldn't change that and I think the face is lit fine. Nice pic!
     
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    The_Traveler,
    Your critique and also the edit is spot on.
     
  11. DanaLane

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    Great comments, all of them! I'll do a little rework and repost!

    And thanks a bunch for the kind words. I've only been shooting people for a few months, and I'm working more on the lighting and tech aspects and forgetting the posing and the like!
     
  12. DanaLane

    DanaLane TPF Noob!

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    Thanks for all the comments, made a few minor changes, see below!

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