did I edit this correctly?

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  1. cactus waltz

    cactus waltz TPF Noob!

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    original:

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    my edit:

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    I think both look good, I just wonder if there's anything you would have done differently.
     
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    I would have tried to get some detail in the building, as it stands it doesn't work for me, love the sky. Ernie
     
  3. Hertz van Rental

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    I prefer the first one.
    The large amount of sky balances well with the silhouette of the building - and all that space counterpoints the bird on the edge. Birds are creatures of the sky so it is only right they contemplate a lot of it.
    The second one feels 'tight' and confined which I don't believe is the right mood.
    Maybe push up the levels or contrast a gnats on the first to get rid of the hint of window - like you have in the second.
    The first one also makes you work a bit harder to figure out what it is all about so that when you see the bird it has more impact.
     
  4. cactus waltz

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    I see what you mean, Hertz. I was in the same line of thinking myself.

    I take it this is the sort of improvement I should have:

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    Ernie, I'm afraid there isn't much detail to be had, it's a pitch black silhuetto to begin with.
     
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    Hertz van Rental TPF Noob!

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    Yep. I think you've got everything out of it that you can - so, on to the next one.
     
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    I would agree with the building detail. As it stands it appears you cut out something the bird was sitting on.
     

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