First Portait - Need serious critique...

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  1. Peniole

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    ...but be nice about the model, dear friend. EDIT: er forgot to say, please feel free to edit this one

    Overcast midday.
    EXIF: 1/400sec, ISO 100, f/4.5
    No exposure bias.
    @ 51mm from a 40-150mm lens.

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    Sorry for being blunt but I wouldn't exactly call that a portrait - too much "clutter" surrounding your friend, I feel you would have done well repositioning her so you'd just have the stone and maybe water in the background. Those glass doors are totally out of place - and so is the handbag! That would have had to go or be cropped out as, I think would the shrubbery... Also, a close-up would have been better.
     
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    Nope, don't be sorry for beng blunt. That's why I'm here. To learn. Thanks for the critique. I have other closer cropped ones, still need processing. I liked this one and wanted feedback.
     
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    If you didnt have the do not edit I could show you the biggest problem you have. It is the crop.
    It also doesn't look very sharp on my monitor.
    The background blurred out would do wonders. Also things that could be demonstrated with an edit.
     
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    My bad, I should have written please feel free to edit this one in the original post. I forget to do that in the critique forum :er: Please go ahead

    How's this crop...

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    First cropped to make the shot about her not the waterfalls.
    second sharpened the image
    third bumped up the contrast
    forth ran a blur brush over the background.

    In my opinion you had a nice portrait hiding in there. About a thirty second fix. Because I got to demonstrate it rather than try to explain you can pick out the individual elements.
     
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    Thank you for taking the time to show me :)
     
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    Don't know if it helps or not but you are most welcome.
     
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    Took my time following what you did, just changed one thing, decided not to blur the step she was sitting on, otherwise I did a 4.7pixel gaussian blur on the background (painstakingly lasso'd, and still with areas on her arm and jeans that I coudn't get right). Any easier way to do that? Magic wand kept mistaking parts of her hair.

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    I dont use photoshop.. My blur is like a brush you move it about like a paintbrush and it blurs. its pretty easy to control.
     
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    I take the more standard approach to portraiture which I am sure that a few who don't do portraiture at all will object to.

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    Well since I have done them over thirty years, I'm not going to object to it. Other than not bluring the background what did you do differently. The blurred out background is a matter of taste really, not any special technique for beginners or experienced pros.
     

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