First portrait attempt...please critique

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  1. crystalview

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    wow, thats really good. i think her eyes look wierd. bust shes very beautiful, who is it?
     
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    Ya the eyes really stands out.. Nice work. :)
     
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    i agree... first thing i thought was "woah, strange eyes"

    but i like the ligthing and angle you got there.
     
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    Thanks everyone! Thats actually my ex-girlfriend. She let me do a few of these the other day.

    As for the eyes, it is kindof a weird look in her eyes on this one. I've got a bunch more, I'll submit more later on. I want to do a little work on them in PS thought first.

    Still learning the composition and post-processing for portraits.

    Thanks!
     
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    Nice portrait! I do love the eyes. The shadow over the lower part of her face bothers me, though.
     
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    Ya those eyes are freakin me out man! I almost think maybe the liner is a bit much? Lighting looks good albeit just a tad dark for me, could be my monitor though.
     
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    thanks for the comments! Actually she put on a little "extra" eye liner for these. I was going to shoot for converting to b&w and thought a little extra might be ok. I'll have to see if I can get her to try again.

    I better not show her this thread though!!! :lol:

    Thanks!
     
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    Like the others said, her eyes are too strong. I'd also soften the shadow on her chin and move her hand away from her sholder, it's rather distracting.

    Otherwise its very good. :)

    Spoken like a red blooded male :wink:
     
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    I like it. Her eyes work well for me to be honest. I figured they were the subject and not her whole face.
     

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