First Portrait

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  1. jjvn

    jjvn TPF Noob!

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    My first portrait attempt, I know it's not the best portrait of all, but I really like it, I like the background, and I like the reflection on her eyes (or maybe I just like the model, I don't know)

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    What do you think?
     
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    I'm no expert but I think the lighting on her forehead, cheak, nose and chin may be a smidge too hot. The coffee cup lid and partial hand are distracting, either show us all of it or crop it out. As I said though...I'm no expert. The expression on her face is really nice. Nice early portrait work.
     
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    I agree that the cup and hand have to go. Its not a bad photo but it needs some more cropping.
     
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    Edited photo
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    Hope it's better. I didn't croped it before because I just wanted to show it as it was. The cup was there because we were returning from lunch, the photo was taken at the office we work.
     
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    Yes, I like this one so much better. I also like the angle of her head!
     
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    That looks better to me even if it is a total square, the hand and lid were not helpng it out before. Much better. The lighting is still a tad hot so you lose a bit of definition in her skin, maybe something to think about next time. otherwise it looks good.
     
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    I agree it's too hot at places and no one mentioned it's out of focus (usually you want to have the eye's dead sharp.. IMO)

    Nice first shot!
     
  8. LaFoto

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    This ought to be in the Weddings and Portraits Forum ... I shall move it over there. That is where all our experts on portrait photography get together more ;).

    Nice model, I have to admit.
    Nice that you refrained from using the on camera flash.
    But now this particular photo has a bit of camera shake.
    Doesn't make her smile any less attractive, mind!!! :D
     
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    The cropped version is much better. Nice job & welcome to TPF.
     
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    I know it has a little camera shake, I just had to take the picture as fast as I could, she never posed for me before, and when I saw that smile I just pressed the shutter button and did't care much about the settings and the shake of the camera.
    Thanks for the advice, I will pay more attention to exposure next time, and also find a better support for the camera.
     

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