first try at self portrait. C&C please!

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  1. Mooshoo4

    Mooshoo4 TPF Noob!

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    I have never tried any self portraits or anything mostly I only ever photograph nature and animals so let me know what you think! ;)

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    #2 seems out of focus and areas of your face are blown out a good bit. #1 seems like the better shot. Maybe if you play with the white balance a bit and processed it a bit otherwise, you could spruce things up a bit. I would "cool" the photo down by playing with the temperature a bit, unless you were going for a warmer tone.
     
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    I agree that #2 is pretty blown out and out of focus. I like the warmer tones in the first one, but it kind of bothers me that the front part of your face is so dark. You can almost see your front eye, but not quite and that back eye just seems so far away to be the focal point. I think its a good self-portrait, I would just lighten up the part of your face closest to us a little bit more. Great start!
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    well this is the original...
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    I just cropped it and brightened it a bit. The second one i really didnt do anything to it... i changed it a tiny tiny bit but you cant really tell much.
     
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    the second is out of focus, but the first is a good start - self portraits are not exactly easy unless you can shoot tethered??
     
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    Why is it needed to lighten the dark side of his face? Wouldn't that take away from the Low Key aspect of the image?

    I also question, for the sake of discussion, why the eye closest to the camera needs to be the focal point?

    I think the image needs brightened a little and more contrast.

    Good go, selfies are difficult to pull off.
     
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    The eye closest to the camera doesn't necessarily need to be the focal point, but in this case it is hard to see the back eye. I feel like I want to peek around his nose to see it better. Maybe "too far away" was a bad choice of words - more like "too inaccessible". I feel like I shouldn't have to work so hard to see the focal point.

    I'm not sure if brightening the image a little will take away from the low-key. I'm not saying to brighten up the whole side of the face a lot, but just enough to make that front eye a little more visible. The way it is right now, it's just distracting to me. He could easily go the other way and darken out the eye altogether, but then I feel like so much of the photo would be dark.

    Actually, now that I think about it, I wonder if turning his face just a smidge toward the camera would make all the difference? That back eye wouldn't be blocked by the nose and that front eye would be thrown more into the shadows. With a little more of the back half of the face turned toward the camera there would be more lighted area of the subject to view while still keeping a low-key feel. Thoughts?
     
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    I actually like the original shot with the light in it much better than I like the cropped version.

    Bekah
     
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    the angle is good. having the light in shot is original. i like that.
     
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    The first shot might have been better if you had some sort of reflector to lighten up the left side of your face. But if your intention was really to blot it out with shadow to achieve an aura of mystery, you got it.
     
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    First one looks good, specially black background is pretty good nice try and good work, you will have improved and better shots in future keep it up
     
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    It's a low-key image, that was the whole intention was to darken a large portion of the subject.
     

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