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  1. ToddM

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    The message of freedom is an oldie but a goodie.

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    I'm not sure what you want to be critiqued on.

    its a snapshot of a nice saying on a wall.
     
  3. ToddM

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    Oddly enough, your reply was a kind of a critique. I take it that you liked it. I just wanted to know if anyone thought it was tripe or not tripe at all. For me, reading these words presented in this monolithic way, painted on the side of this building, kindle emotions of faith in what America stands for.
     
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    Maybe you could fix the barrel distortion. Is that the right term?
     
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    Yup, there's definitel barrel distortion.

    Also...I dunno, I mean yeah the words have punch, but overall the photo itself is rather lifeless. The half-cut-off cars really detract from this shot, as does the flat, dead-on-square angle. Maybe a re-shoot from closer and off to one side, to really emphasize that monolithic impression you get...
     
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    Yeah, that's a righteous critque. I agree with you. Those are great :idea:'s.
     
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    i liked the message... but i don't really like the photograph. its not something i would ever have the urge to hang on a wall... i'd like to see the message pulled into the photograph, rather than being a photo of a message. it needs something juxtaposed with it to breathe a little life into it...
     
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    Yeah, I don't think I'll be submitting it to the Smithsonian or anything like that. :roll:
     

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