Hands

Discussion in 'Critique Forum Archives' started by Johnboy2978, Oct 18, 2005.

  1. Johnboy2978

    Johnboy2978 No longer a newbie, moving up!

    Joined:
    Oct 21, 2004
    Messages:
    1,797
    Likes Received:
    30
    Location:
    Southwest Virginia
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos OK to edit
    Was wondering if someone could assist with composure here. I've seen this done nicely in the past, but can't recall exactly how it was composed. I'd like to do a series of my daughter with 3 or 4 pics with one being something similar to this. This is close to what I want, but not quite. And I realize that the focus is really soft in this one (f/4 1/15 iso 800) perhaps a change in the aperture to help that?
    Comments?
    Original Composition
    [​IMG]

    And this is from the re-shoot.
    [​IMG]
     
  2. Hertz van Rental

    Hertz van Rental TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Nov 8, 2004
    Messages:
    16,728
    Likes Received:
    45
    Location:
    Where am I now?
    You really want to have the big hand coming in from the left.
    You've got it coming in from the right against the visual flow of the eye.
    Try reversing the image to see if it doesn't work better like that.

    And bin the frame - it's too heavy for the subject.
     
  3. fightheheathens

    fightheheathens TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Aug 1, 2005
    Messages:
    1,011
    Likes Received:
    3
    Location:
    Berkeley
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos NOT OK to edit
    i think it needs more light, that also might help with the soft focus, then you wouldnt have to use such a slow shutter speed.
     
  4. Alison

    Alison Swiss Army Friend Supporting Member

    Joined:
    Jun 21, 2004
    Messages:
    9,469
    Likes Received:
    96
    Location:
    TX
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos OK to edit
    I've done a few of these shots, and normally focus on the baby's hand grasping onto one finger of the bigger hand. I agree with the comments about the lighting as well. Perhaps position yourself near a window to get some natural lighting. The image appears a bit grey, wihtout any true blacks or whites. It's also hard for me to determine where the baby is coming from in this shot. I would just keep trying with other positions, include the full hands, closeups of just a finger or two, etc and see what seems right to you!
     
  5. RickyN29

    RickyN29 TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Jul 28, 2005
    Messages:
    146
    Likes Received:
    3
    Location:
    San Jose, California
    Yeah, the orientiation of the photo is confusing. I cannot understand where the hands are coming from. The background, though nicely blurred, seems to distract me.
     
  6. Johnboy2978

    Johnboy2978 No longer a newbie, moving up!

    Joined:
    Oct 21, 2004
    Messages:
    1,797
    Likes Received:
    30
    Location:
    Southwest Virginia
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos OK to edit
    I attempted this again and put the after shot in the original post. Is this an improvement?
     
  7. terri

    terri Administrator Staff Member Supporting Member

    Joined:
    Sep 2, 2003
    Messages:
    25,337
    Likes Received:
    2,089
    Location:
    In the mental ward of this forum
    Can others edit my Photos:
    Photos NOT OK to edit
    I think the second one is a big improvement! :) Still, I'd continue to try some more and, as Alison suggested, try using two fingers or just some different angles. With a big spread you're bound to come up with something you like. These are always so nice.
     
  8. Hertz van Rental

    Hertz van Rental TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Nov 8, 2004
    Messages:
    16,728
    Likes Received:
    45
    Location:
    Where am I now?
    Nit picky time again :lol:
    Try having the babies hand coming up from the bottom of frame - for the same reasons I said to have the hand coming in from the left.

    Otherwise a much nicer shot.
    I'd stick with reeshooting it. You'll find it gets better every time.
     
  9. Marctwo

    Marctwo TPF Noob!

    Joined:
    Aug 19, 2005
    Messages:
    485
    Likes Received:
    10
    Location:
    B'ham, UK
    If you took the adult hand from the first shot and had the baby's hand from the second shot holding the adult index finger, then it would work for me.
     

Share This Page