informal portrait attempt

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  1. Corry

    Corry Flirtacious and Bodacious Supporting Member

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    Ok, during the same shoot that I did my emotions entry, I tried several other portraits. I did one of each of the girls in this similar set up. Since portaiture is something I want to get more into, I'd like some critique on this. The sun is going down over the horizon behind her...is it too blown out? Oh, and this is also a bit desaturated. I can post a full color one if you'd like, and also the shots fo the two other girls. Let me know what I could have done better! :)

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    Oh, and I'm aware that the thing sticking out from under her shirt is distracting...maybe I should try cloning it out...
     
  2. Uselessdreamer1

    Uselessdreamer1 TPF Noob!

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    i think the grass infront of her legs is distracting.
     
  3. Big Mike

    Big Mike I am Big, I am Mike Staff Member Supporting Member

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    I do think the bright highlights behind are a bit distracting...but that light creates a beautiful hair light. Maybe if you could have been a foot or two higher...

    Otherwise I think it's fantastic. Nice work Corry.
     
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    hmmm. for me the desaturation isn't working really well here... would you mind posting up the full color version... or even a B/W one maybe? :) thanks!
     
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    I'd love to see the full color pic. I agree with Mike about the lighting in this one. Something in the coloring seems weird to me though (grass looks blue)...not sure could be my monitor or something....anyone else see this?
     
  6. Corry

    Corry Flirtacious and Bodacious Supporting Member

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    Full Color:
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    B/W:
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    Thanks for postin the other pics, I like the B&W the best! Good shot!!!!
     
  8. aggiezach

    aggiezach Yup...

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    I agree with ero, the B&W version is the one I like the best!


    Zach :D
     
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    B&W is the winner. I would add a lil more contrast. Good job Corry.
     
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    They're ok, but I sure love the shot of the Xena avatar!! that's priceless.
     
  11. Corry

    Corry Flirtacious and Bodacious Supporting Member

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    Really???? I like the black and white the least! I'll try and play around with it and get it to my liking.
     
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    I like the B&W. Too points: I would prefer the subject to not be right in the middle, and the pose seems to reserved to me, likes she's trying to hide from the camera the way her body is twisted.
     

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