Little girl in memorial

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  1. meesh

    meesh TPF Noob!

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    Hi! Looking for comments and critiques. I need to send this to her parents, so I didn't want a background full of a bunch of crosses. I tried to photoshop those out, but I'm still a newbie and photoshop and photography. Anyway, I attached the original and another one I took, both with no post processing. These were taken with b&w film ISO 400. I dont know what my aperture or shutter speed were set to. Anyway, feel free to edit if you want:)

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  2. loser101

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    I really love the secound one. THe place she standing, the line of crosses, the theme park in the back ground just makes the picture for me. It also feels so very natural but then agian it gives me a wierd feeling.

    Sorry if thats not what you meant with the picture, but i really love it.

    I might not choosen my words well to discribe what i mean but yeah....

    -oleg
     
  3. harrisoncj

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    I agree, the second one is awesome... I would just fix the comp a bit so that it's not so central.
     
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    My take on #2......may not be what you're looking for, but.....

    Crop, duotone, levels, contrast, blur......


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    There's some mixed messages in these. Your first treatment is probably the way to go if you're looking for a suitable shot to send to parents.

    Here's my version for the lack of something better to do today.

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  6. Chris of Arabia

    Chris of Arabia Herding cats since 1988... Supporting Member

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    There's this weird kind of Schindler's List feel to it (so my wife says) - almost like she doesn't belong in the scene that surrounds her. The third version does look almost as if she's a cut 'n' paste addition round her head, but not lower down.

    >;o))
     
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    What a powerful juxstaposition. The innocence of the girl, then the death behind her, finished with a carnival?

    :hail: :hail: :hail:
     
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    This is a poor scan or the film grain is very prominent.
    I got the idea you wanted to take out the crosses, I just put in more sand and lightened it up a little.

    This won't hold up for much printing, unless you purposefully add noise like printing on canvas.

    Here are two edits,slight sepia and normal

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    Ok now it is my turn to have a go....

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    The second one is the best, but i would fix the comp.
     
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    thanks for all the comments and editing! I really appreciate it! yeah I wasnt at the memorial site in attempt to take photos of the little girl...she kind of just ran up to me and asked what I was doing...And I couldnt help but take photos of her! Im sending them to her parents just because they generously let me use her as a model! anyway thanks a lot everyone! Still willing to take on more comments...thanks again
     
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    I think The Traveler went a little too far.... That looks so poorly photoshopped that its not even funny.

    Little might be an understatement.
     

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