Looking through the window

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  1. tr0gd0o0r

    tr0gd0o0r TPF Noob!

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    I went out the other day looking to show how parts of our city have decayed from a happening center of the city into building that are completely useless and ignored. I got these two shots with about hte same idea, but I can't decide which i like better. Which do you think? (If you don't mind, a critique of the photo you choose would be appreciated.)

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  2. MDowdey

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    ill take a stab..


    i like the second one for the composition, so heres my critique:

    1) i believe it is lacking contrast, i would bump this a little...
    2) Instead of decay or dilapidation, i see the union of man and nature. its kind of cool
    3) I would try and bring the window frame even more to the right lower side of the photo to increase the dramatic feel of the overgrowth.

    good work!!!!


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  3. Chase

    Chase I am now benign! Staff Member Supporting Member

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    This is an example of how a quick explanation of what you were going for can make all of the difference in the world!

    I would agree with Matt in that I prefer the second photo. The first one doesn't give me much of a sense of decay, instead I find myself looking through the door/window and wondering what's on the other side. I guess it makes my mind wander a bit.

    The second one I believe is a stronger image. I like the composition, the subject is more interesting, but again I don't get the strong feeling of decay. I would agree with the points Matt brought up.
     
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    I don't see decay in the second one. Ignore inside the window and its full of life.

    The first pic is incorrectly titled, Abandoned would be better




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    you're right, abandoned is probably the better word for what I was really going for
     

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