looks like a watch advertisement

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  1. judehei

    judehei TPF Noob!

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    shot with a pos flash, I'd rather have found some way of relecting in her eyes a bit, but I didn't manage it. A little dark, but I love the composition. any comments? (good/bad/ugly?)
     
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    she's fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiine thats all i have to say ;)
     
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    yea, i wish the wind was blowing a little harder :D

    otherwise, it's an interesting angle, and the model has good expression of confusion and possible innocence.
     
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    I like the angle. Like you mentioned, some fill flash would really help her eyes and face stand out more.
     
  5. MDowdey

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    ok since this is the critique forum, ill be the jerk and blast this one,

    1) she looks confused yes, possibly even dumb. kind of a vacant stare in her eyes.
    2) the angle makes me tilt my head, and now my neck hurts.
    3) i like the idea but i want more color and get her outta the middle of the frame.

    just my .02

    i think you are going in the right direction though!!

    md
     
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    I kind of like the angle of the shot...it adds interest to the vertical lines of the building that would otherwise be a little boring.

    I like the pose but I don't like that she is looking out of the frame in a disinterested sort of way. Her face is a bit dark...a reflector would have been useful here.

    I like the wavy reflection in the window behind the model but it is stealing some attention away from the model.
     
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    it doesn't seem like an ad to me at all; it's much more realistic than that, journalistic even, (besides the angle)

    the pristine marble-y stuff of the building seems to be in dischord with her outfit...

    it's a very interesting shot, i can't recall anything else like it
     
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    I like this alot...I would perfer it if you zoomed a bit more on the model..either that or croped a bit around her theres to much background space.
     
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    I think that composition is quite original and if you like it it's ok, but i'd prefer it not soooo tilted. And I'd like to see a handsome guy insead of her :p
     
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    Yeah the watch stands out a lot.... That's probably because she's not looking at the camera, so the attention goes to the watch.

    We need more wind though...:p
     

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