Meow Sir (this IS risque, don't look if that offends you)

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  1. DramaDork626

    DramaDork626 TPF Noob!

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    WARNING: I already warned this is risque, if u r under 18, well, whatever, just warning ya. It isn't THAT risque, but I dunno what the policy is for something like this *shrug* Delete it if you must. But it not. thanks
    I took this with Olympus digital, indoor, with flash
    Ok, the coloring may be a little sloppy, I intend to fix it in the future, but what I am looking for now is to see how the composition is and how you like the idea of the somewhat old fashioned coloring.
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    Chase I am now benign! Staff Member Supporting Member

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    No need to delete, but we usually put a warning on the title of the post to let people know if they are viewing from work that they may want to be cautious. I think you've done that, but using something like "may not be work safe" makes it a little easier.
     
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    like the crop but I wish the background was darker.

    Im not a fan of the coloring on this one... a least not as light as it is. Maybe use more saturated colors... really make them pop against the strong BW and draw you into the human figure.

    I would like to just see it as a BW... the sex appeal found in the flesh offered by BW just presents itself better as a form of art... it help define the body.

    The abdomen is also washed out pretty strongly.
     
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    I like the color, except for the bright yellow spots. I agree that the background could be darker and less distracting.

    As for composition...I find it too tight, it gives me a feeling of being crammed into a small space while trying to get a wider view. The image itself naturally leads us to want to see more...in all four directions. It creates a kind of visual tension for me...my eye moves around the image..looking for something that's just not there. I want to look away, but I can't.

    All in all, I think that makes it a strong image...well done.
     
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    For some reason it reminds me of the new Willy Wonka movie, himself. :)

    The colouring looks nicely artistic.
     
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    i dont like it. at all. sorry. the lighting is bad, it's terribly blown out (i'm guessing you used an on-board flash), it's out of focus, the background is bad, the clothing/props dont work together, and the selective coloring is very very sloppy. the composition is ok, but there really is no reason for you to crop off her head. it doesnt help the image at all, it just makes it different from most other shots like this, which does not make it any better. i've liked your stuff before, but not this one.
     
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    I like the comp but personally would love it alot more in full on B+W with a little grain or diffuse added. Just my $.02
     
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    ^yes, that would help.
     
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    the background defintely needs to be darkened as apart from her chest, my eyes are drawn to the poster of the man in the top hat (looks like willy wonka?!)
     
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    Ok, i changed it to all BnW, darkened the background more, and played with the lighting to bring more attention to the curves of the body. Whadya say?
     
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    I would have to say that the second one in full BW gets my vote. The only thing is the flash spot on her stomach is really strong. I would try it again with a reshot. Just watch the flash and try to capture a sharper image it looks slightly out of focus. Like the comp. alot its definatelly worth a reshot
     
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    good stuff. copy and paste the red collar in. i reckon it'll give it a nice abstract touch...
     

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