It doesn't "offend" me, but I don't think the effect you're going for works. My first impression was that there foreground is just in the way and you can't see much of the mountain because of it and the fairly dull colors. But if you're going for some sort of artsy military domination of nature or something where you're using the out-of-focus foreground for a purpose ... it doesn't really work for me. I don't have suggestions on how to make it better because I'm not sure how. But, sorry, it doesn't really work for me.