My attempt @ "ART" C&C please

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  1. Ron Evers

    Ron Evers Been spending a lot of time on here!

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    First off the camera

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    Then my attempt @ art. :wink:

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    Personally, I would stick with the original image. It is a nice looking photograph. The border around the outside makes it look a little cheesy. But that is just my opinion, others may like it.

    I don't know if it is just how it looks on the website or on my monitor, but both pictures appear a little grainy.
     
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    macdsean, I do not see graininess but I checked what my setting were & I find my ISO was high @ 200 from some previous shots.
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    t 1/500
     
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    First off, ISO 200 is not high, and as Ron said, I don't see any excessive noise/grain either. With respect to the issue of the actual image, I prefer the original as well. Mainly because the vignette tends to focus the eye on a very bright area.

    Looking at the original be very careful of your background; in this case it is over-bright to blown with dark shadows, caused by the fact that there's a very bright light source between directly behind the plant. Solutions for this would be to either use a diffuser between the light and the plant, or change your shooting position, or wait for a more appropriate time of day.
     
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    tirediron, the objective of the picture was to get the sunlight shining through the berries causing them to "glow". Without the light directly behind they do not glow as you can see with the berries in the perimeter of the picture. In the full size pic you can actually see seeds inside the glowing berries.
     
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    I like the second one, but I'd brighten up the plants/berries now as they look slightly underexposed.

    My eyes don't know where to look in the first pic. It's all too busy and monotonous to me. Your edit tells me exactly where to look, and makes the subject look quite secretive being hidden behind what my eyes now assume is a shaded area of plantation.

    My one criticism is that your dark mask is too perfectly eliptical. I'd like to see it uneven so it fits in with the nature and looks like shadow, rather than a frame.
     
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    Thanks nynfortoo, yes I see it could be brightened a little. I will have to experiment with shaping.
     
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    Don't mind that bright flash, that was just the light coming on for me. :lol: I understand now. I like the idea; as an alternative, how about a macro of just one or two berries?
     
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    There is a huge amount of noise.
     
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    For me, I think I would prefer a more subtle vignette effect. This one is so strong it originally made me think you were looking through a telescope or a gun sight! :)
     
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    I agree. Thanks for your comment.
     
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    i like the first one the best, i could see what you were trying to accomplish before you mentioned it, great idea!
     

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