my first laid back/handheld try at a portrait

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  1. danalec99

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    Feel free!
     
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    Oh dear.
    His head's cut off.
    Yet you left him so much collar.
    It's a pity to see his head cut off. He looks friendly enough - I'm sure he's GOT brains..... (;))
     
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    Okay. Thanks for that point!
     
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    I don't think cropping into the head is itself an issue, but I do agree it's a little drastic here. I tend to use it to get a sense of intimacy, but when in closer and not usually this much. I like everything else. The background is blurred out enough to not be distracting, yet there's enough detail to add to the story, and the lighting works well. There's a little bit of a hot-spot on the nose, but I still like it.

    Well done!
     
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    The head cropping was a result of some of the portraits that I've come accross. But I see the point that I should only attempt that when the image is more closed in.

    thank you.
     
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    It doesn't fly for me. I have issues with the crop. My monitor shows a yellow cast on the complexion. I don't like the background

    One of the main things that separates portraits from snapshots is the detail in the eyes. The eyes have to be more than black holes.
     
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    Heh. I keep forgetting that my laptop's monitor is messed up. It kills the contrast and lowers the saturation. This shot has a lot, so the monitor made it look softer than it is. Now I see the yellow and the background doesn't work as well as I thought. Sorry.
     
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    You've heard the bad points, so I'll throw in some good points. I liked the expressiveness you caught in his eyes and his smile. The shot has a really warm and friendly feel.

    I think you did well with the DOF and you made a difficult shot (awful lighting conditions) have a bit of personality.

    Keep working on it. I think you're almost there.


    Daniel
     
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    In addition to what others said about not cutting off the head and dark eyes, I would have done it as a vertical. A single person, whether full body, cut off at the waist, or head shot, always works better as a vertical. Fill the frame and try not to cut off body parts.

    The space at the left is wasted and the bright spots from the lights are distracting.
     
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    Thanks everyone for the comments

    Cheers :)
     
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    I actually really like the crop.
    I like the whole pic.
    :)
     
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    hehe...this is funny :)

    I like it too Captain :lol:
     

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