Nature Park (First critique image)

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  1. Scurra

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    This is a shot I took a few days ago at a local nature park, I really liked the lines so I thought I'd post it here and get it critiqued by you fine folks.

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    This is my first image up for critique so I'm looking forward to seeing what happens.
     
  2. Scurra

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    Someone lay into it please :)
     
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    ok ok :D
    I don't know much about shots like this but it seems ok to me. IMO you should crop the bottom (there's a strip of light on the grass, that should be a perfect border)
     
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    Hi Scurra,

    Not sure what to say about it. I like it and I don't...
    But that is just taste...

    I defenatly like the depht that is giving the image.
    With one look You are not ready with this image.
    There is a lot to look at, so you have captured that very well. The lightning seems ok to me.

    What I am curious about is on what point thid you focused in the shot?

    Kind regards,

    Jean-Paul
     
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    I like the composition, but I find the light patches in the top of the image to be distracting. I think it would emphasize the path to the lake better with much of the top cropped off, almost making the image square.

    Also the white sky is actually sort of pink or magenta, which looks a bit weird.
     
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    My thoughts exactaly. I think if you take off the majority of the trees at the top and focus on the path the image will be much stronger.
     
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    I'd think I agree with ksmattfish & AllisonS.

    It's would work better to crop it to focus more on the path.

    Your basic instincts on the shot seem good though.
     
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    Ok folks I tried your suggestions and cropped a little from the bottom to start the image in the highlighted grass and then cropped a lot of the top down.

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    Any better?
     
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    I know this is gunna sound weird, but can you leave the top on (with tree banches) and crop the bottom right off to where the shadowed grass starts (get rid off all the grass in sunlight). It will be interesting to see all three images actually.
     
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    Hia Scurra,

    The original was a nice shot but the edited version is, i think, pretty much spot on. The path leads you through the picture quite nicely and the top half of the trees aren't there to distract your attention.
     
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    Here's the third image as requested by 2Stupid2Duck, I have left the top portion of the image intact and instead removed the highlited grass at the foot of the image.

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    Also in answer to Bellavue's earlier question I believe the point that my camera focussed on was the lake way down in the distance, however the depth of field has allowed me to keep all of the image sharp.
     
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    I like the last one best, it looks totally "different".
     

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