Not all it could have been...

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  1. Indecent Exposures

    Indecent Exposures TPF Noob!

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    While out one evening last summer, I came across the old-fashioned carousel shown below. With the quick movement in the centre of the shot and people standing in the foreground I thought it looked a promising shot, so grabbed the camera and tripod. It hasn't come out as well as I hoped though, but don't know why.

    Any critiqu-ing would be much appreciated, possibly in terms of cropping/composition?

    Shot was taken on a little Olympus C-300.

    Thanks for your help

    Chris

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    LaFoto Just Corinna in real life Staff Member Supporting Member

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    Well, don't take my comment/attempt at answer to your question for any expert knowledge, actually I am only guessing, but .... you might have been happier with just that bit of a longer exposure? So the caroussel would have been even more stripey, blurrier, more abstract, and the still persons would have got a bit more detail.

    That is my guess.
    Let's see what others say.
    I am as curiuos now as you are.
     
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    I would go the other way - a shorter exposure - still giving movement but the figures in front as silhuettes. Now you have set me off looking for similar shots in my archives!
     
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    Is it okay to post an edit?
     
  5. Indecent Exposures

    Indecent Exposures TPF Noob!

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    Please do!
     
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    I'm not sure exactly what you were going for. There's the potential for a "neat" image with just the effect of the blurred carousel, but when I looked at it, there seemed to be an aspect of isolation to it. I tried a couple of crops that brought the focus more on the one observer and the blurred riders in an effort to try and emphasize that a little. I also made a slight curves adjustment.

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    If you shot in raw I would love to see it with a different white balance
     
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    ksmattfish Now 100% DC - not as cool as I once was, but still

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    I'd like to see deeper blacks in the foreground.

    Compose closer, like Mark suggested. I think that getting rid of the black at the top helps the black at the bottom stand out better.

    I also agree that tweaking the white balance to let some more color come through the tungsten cast. I like the orange, but maybe subdue it just a bit.

    I think a tripod would have helped, and possibly if you had made the shot earlier in the evening (at sunset) the remaining ambient sun light would have lessened the contrast some.
     
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    Indecent Exposures TPF Noob!

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    I agree that it looks much better closer in.

    You mention tweaking the white balance - which way? Haven't really experimented with it before.

    Also - Mark - what's a 'curves adjustment'?

    Thanks for the help guys!

    Cheers

    Chris
     
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    ksmattfish Now 100% DC - not as cool as I once was, but still

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    Tungsten lighting, the regular screw in bulbs we all use, is very orange light. If you cooled down the white balance (added blue) some more of the normal colors would come through. Don't get rid of all the orange though, it definately adds to the atmosphere.
     
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    i think the shot would have been more interesting with you tracking the carousel and having all the people on the outside be blurred. it's more of a juxtaposition to an older theme.
     
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