Poems

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  1. aghastpumpkin

    aghastpumpkin TPF Noob!

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    OK, i am sixteen and write a lot of poetry which helps me think.
    I wrote these about people and also whilst in a previous, disastrous relationship, lol!
    Tell me what you think!


    S L O W M O T I O N

    Life, stands still,
    and my head revolves.
    Slowly.

    She pauses, and
    takes a breath.
    Slowly.

    I take her hand, she
    reaches out.
    Slowly.

    The moment lingers.
    Slowly.
    But my heart, beats.
    Fast.

    Light

    The light shines upon my chest,
    It twists and turns, casting
    Red patterns inside of me,
    That seem to resemble balloons
    That are pinched upon the top.

    I look directly and burn my eyes,
    Its beauty is beyond compare, and
    I mutter slowly, praising the lord,
    As my red balloons inside of me grow
    Massive. I dare not look away.

    My hand touches, feels the contours,
    And as a happy emotion surfaces, the
    Light intensifies. A weight on my shoulder,
    And the beautiful light shines behind me,
    Ever watchful, ever in love.
     
  2. vonnagy

    vonnagy have kiwi, will travel...

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    good stuff, i really enjoyed the rhythm of your first poem!
     
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