Discussion in 'Critique Forum Archives' started by Tuna, May 23, 2005.
I'm not really sure about this shot. Something here just doesn't feel right, and usually I love your shots. So I guess I'll just list what I notice and then maybe someone could help elaborate more
-What does the woman do for the photo?
-Don't understand the title
-Could use more contrast to help the greyness
-Shoot at other angles?
-It seems like maybe there is something here photo worthy, but to me this just doens't seem to be it
-On behalf of Hertz I would like to ask what was the reason for taking the shot? What did you want to achieve by taking it? And so on...
It a giant eraser, I agree about the women crop or clone here off. Im Ok angle and contrast, the shoot by it self does little for me, but maybe as parts of a photo essay on public art it would be a good one
i assume you included the woman to compare size and your title is fitting since the eraser looks like it's on the move. i like the b&w but not the noise. the time of day was perfect for the shadow.
so, you've been hanging out on constitution avenue i see . lots of interesting exhibits there wouldn't you say?
The erasers in MO must be must different than the ones you all see I have never in my life seen or used an eraser such as this
I like it, and I guess the woman is there to convey the impression the eraser, (I've never seen one quitelike that either) is chasing her. The only problem is, she looks a little too sedate for that to quite come off. Now if you re-shot with a model running and looking back over their shoulder in panic.....
I don't see this as being one of your better pictures, a nice show and tell picture but not quite up to your usual great shots. The eraser blends into the background to much but the shadow is a nice feature. Maybe if the woman was in the path of the erasure walking away from it that may add a little drama.
I think the woman in the picture works really well! The picture is of a situtation with all the ingredients for a catastrophe:
The woman minding her own business, walking AND reading while walking in the park, totally unaware that a giant eraser moving fast but quietly (cos it's rubber!) is just five feet from her.
She's lucky: the giant eraser will pass her from behind, but what will happen, when the giant rubber exits the park and heads down the city's main street just behind the trees?
I think with more contrast this picture wouldn't have looked so 'accidental', now it has the feeling of a newspaper shot, which I like.
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