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  1. Tuna

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    I am much more comfortable with candid, street shots of people. Here I have attempted a more formal shot and all comments and critique would be appreciated as to it's technical and aesthetic effectiveness.

    Leica MP, Voigtlander 35/1.7 Ultron, Kodak CN400 B&W film.

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    I like what you're shooting for here but something feels uneasy about this to me...maybe the crop, but it could be the orientation. I keep wanting to see this same shot but vertical rather than horizontal. But it also seems that maybe if you cropped about an inch off the left hand side that it could work out as well.
     
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    I like it a bunch, but would agree a tighter crop would be more effective here. I don't mind it remaining horizontal, but the girls and the birdbath alone would do it for me, without the additional space on either side. It doesn't do anything to add to the photograph.

    Pretty girls! :)
     
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    Hmmm... Here is one cropped a bit tighter AND a little lighter background.

    Better?

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    I dig it!!! I get the feeling that these kids are up to a lot more then what we see. I love the bird bath. The photos taken by the incomprable Diane Arbus comes to mind.
     
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    Craig, thanks for your comment and I had to show it to my wife and daughter. Here's why: this is a shot of my sister's little girls and after the shoot in areas around our house, my wife and daughter asked when they could see the pictures. Knowing that they expected the standard smiley/cutesy shots, I warned them that I had taken many Arbus-like portraits and that the images may be a little different than expected. Not knowing Arbus or her style, they shrugged me off. Later, when they saw the images, this one a few others seemed "disturbing" to them...

    Your message re-affirmed my earlier comment and I'm glad you recognized the Arbus style. I have always enjoyed seeing her images in the past.

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    A great improvement. :thumbup: That's the shot. Nice work!
     
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    Cool. Your work is completely different from mine. I really enjoy it.
     
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    I agree that this photograph need to crop the unwanted area and it seems like you did a great job of croping. Nice shot by the way. This photograph kind of mysterious when you look at the pathway to the wood and the girls stand at the entrance and the gate (birdbath).
     
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    I like the second version. The background in the first image is a bit dark for me.
    Beautiful portrait!
     
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    Exactly :)
     
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    No, I think I like the original crop better. The space created a lot of mood. Try bringing the contrast up on the original, and making sure the edges of the photo don't get too bright. Basically bump up your contrast, dodge-burn the center subject and burn down the corners a bit.

    The subjects are really dominant enough here that the extra space is helping you out.

    That said -- the difference here is in who the girls are. If this is for your family, or friends, then yes the tighter crop works and makes it more of a "portrait." But the wider view creates much more mood and really allows you to say something about your subjects.

    So, because I don't know them, I greatly prefer the oroginal crop.
     
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