Some Portrait of Clayne- C&C please

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  1. chris_arnet

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    I was sitting in Photojournalism today and we were watching the news about the girl that was found in a box at that fishing tournament in South Carolina. I cought This expression on My friend Clayne's face.

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    Any C&C appreciated! Thank You!!
     
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    THe focus is soft, its underexposed and i think it needs a lil bit less head room. Other then that it seems very dry and i think there could be more emotion in his face. The background is also very distracting.
     
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    Your camera is metering off the background/ceiling, which has underexposed your subject. You need to learn to compensate for this. The focus is also slightly soft.
     
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    Wow the first thing we agree with lol
     
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    yeah, it think i know why:

    i was shooting with an aperture of 1.8 because lighting inside schools is pretty crappy, and i had the AF on SERVO (for moving subjects), not FOCUS (for still ones).

    and i like the expression on his face personally.
     
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    Aperture has nothing to do with the exposure being off. Your AF mode will influence focusing though.

    As for his face, I think he just looks a bit dumbfounded. I don't believe it came across quite as dramatic as you had intended.
     
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    naw, i knew that. i meant for the softness. why it isnt as sharp.
     
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    I'm confused. Aperture, in this case, doesn't have anything to do with the sharpness either.
     
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    He thought you are referring to the blurry background, which aperture does play a role.
     
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    right, DOF. his face wasnt sharp because i had the focus mode wrong so it wasnt exactly in focus. which is unfortunate, because i really liked the expression on his face, and its doubtful ill ever see it again.
     
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    Try going into Photoshop and adding an unsharp mask, it might help
     
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    [​IMG] there is the pic with an unsharp mask what do u think?
     

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