Story with Photos

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  1. ronanphilip

    ronanphilip TPF Noob!

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    Had to do a small assignment for photography class. Tell a story with 5 to 6 photos. Here is what two of us came up with. c&c welcome, take it easy remember were only beginers :lol:


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    Maybe it's just my weird sense of humor, but I cracked up. :D
     
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    where's the blood?
     
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    i LOVE the combination of this phrase and your avatar.

    back to topic, it doesn't do it for me. the photos are p&s looking and the story rather poor, imo.
    my 2c...
     
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    Is there an alternative ending?;)
     
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    Mm, might be me .. but i don't get the story. Of course, that might be exactly what you're after. Or, I'm pretty daft. Any will do.

    As far the pictures are concerned, a bit to p&s for my liking but i can see you do have a sense for framing and composition (i.e. not all full body shots showing the action, but alternating between overall and close-up .. and use of angles).

    So .. potential .. and keep it up!
     
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    yea prob should have put it in the just for fun section :lol:


    was the first thing poped into my head, had a lot of stuff to do in other subjects so we were under pressure hence the story:lol:

    was all put together in a bit of a hurry, thanks for comments everyone especially Hyra for the bit of encouragement
     
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    seriously, this one could be better, to me story telling in pic is like reading a comic book in a way. if you notice all 5 pic you used props except pic 6. thats why " where's the blood " that could've finish it up.

    PS. spaceman Iam no vampire but i like blood pudding lol..
     
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    if i was to take these again what would you do to improve them?
     
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    I could be wrong, but I think working on the lighting would improve these photos a lot.

    As for ideas, I got the story so it's not hard to follow.
     
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    this is just a suggestion ok, i am not saying, the existing picture are not good, it just needs a tad of finising touches and direction to me at least.

    UNDER PRESSURE!
    pic #1. you can add a few books to your props.
    pic #2. add somebody ( with a facial expression but dont over do it) with her holding paperworks ( anything will do ) or explanning something. those crumpled paper, its distracting.
    pic #3. again, it like food with out taste. props, few paper, books, coffe mug, take out food ( pizza what ever ) and wall clock that say's 3 am or some thing, its up to you. oh, one more thing she should be talking on the phone if you want.
    pic #4. this one is fine, but the text say's use the other door, you might consider replacing it with OUT FOR LUNCH.. lol
    pic #5 i like your intention but there is no movement, i mean if you look closely, her hair are all pointing straight down same with her jacket ( unpi the jacket), you can use a fan to blow out her hair to fake falling down.
    pic #5. the ending. her position to me is to stage and to neat!
    AGAIN, WHERE'S THE BLOOD!!!!!! AND IF YOU CAN USE SELECTIVE COLORING USE IT FOR THE BLOOOOOOOD!!!!!!!!

    PS; WATCH A HORROR MOVE OR SUSPENCE.
    HOPE THIS HELPS..
     
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    thanks

    yea some of your suggestions make sense, i will consider them in future some i wouldnt fully agree with.

    going by your avater and some of your comments id say your a bit of a horror fan, im not, didnt want it to look like a horror movie click :lol:

    didnt have much time to get props together was done in a bit of a hurry but also didnt want to clutter up the shots, and wanted to leave somethings to peoples imagination

    defo not enough time to sort out a fan:lol:.

    thanks synnove aswell, will defo have to work on lighting :thumbup:
     
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