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  1. Tuna

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    Maybe a little too ambitious but this is an attempt to save a ruined capture and turn it into something worthwhile...something a little artsy.

    Your comments on the aesthetic merits would be helpful.

    Leica IIIc, 50mm Elmar, HP5 B&W film.

    Tuna

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  2. JonMikal

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    i like it a lot, but the longer i look at it, i wanna slide the foreground table out of the frame...the process left the table too blown imo.

    love the tone and grain you've created.
     
  3. Tuna

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    Agreed, Jon Mikal. Blown-out foreground table - but I hate to lose it from this composition. Without it the image loses some of it's "loneliness", in my opinion.

    I have attempted to recover it here - better?

    Tuna

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  4. JonMikal

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    i agree, the table should remain...that's why i hesitated to remove it immediately ;)

    i like the repost better...what do you think?
     
  5. ksmattfish

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    I disagree. The bright, foreground table is way too much. Even sedated in the second post, it's a big distraction. There is one man; how much lonelier can it get? That table still needs to be darker if it is to remain. It overpowers the man and the image on the wall. These should be the main focal points.
     
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    I aggree with Matt, the table is a distraction. My eyes always went back to the bright table. It should not be removed though, just darkened more.
     
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    Cropping off the table in my opinion is a good idea. I don't feel it adds to his "loneliness", only diminishes from the subject of this photo. In short, it is a distraction.
     
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    I agree with matt
     
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    i can see where the table is still an issue, but added space around the subject lends more to a sense of loniness imo.

    Matt, are you suggesting to crop the table out or remove the table leaving space.
     
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    Well, I like it better when I scroll my screen so I can't see the table. Maybe the table could be made even darker than in the repost if the square composition needs to be retained?

    By the way, I do like the photo, and I'm a big fan of Mr. Tuna's work. :)
     

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