The Most Powerful Weapon in the World

stsinner · Jan 19, 2009

Just look at the damage it has done to the economies of the world.. All it needs is the dotted line of a mortgage to be very, very dangerous..

Opinions?

BrandonS · Jan 19, 2009

Good representation of the message you are trying to portray. I like the DOF you've used as it makes it somewhat more dynamic than a pen; also puts emphasis on the flag.

The one thing I don't like though is you can see the platform front and back. It kind of distracts from it.

AlexColeman · Jan 19, 2009

Very nice, but a closer crop would help.

stsinner · Jan 19, 2009

Does this improve the idea or take away from it? Thanks.

TheSon · Jan 19, 2009

Not really enjoying the framing. The background has too many lines/reflections and the platform has visible scratches that are very distracting. It looks like you just took a picture of a pen on a counter top.

Plus it looks like the counter is textured, so you don't get a clean reflection. And the DOF is off. I would think you would want the whole pen in focus?

Doesn't look too professional, but I don't know what kind of look you were going for.

pauliec · Jan 19, 2009

stsinner said:
Does this improve the idea or take away from it? Thanks.

I'd like to see the whole pen, just cropped closer.

Prophet · Jan 19, 2009

The picture is soft. The color is wrong. Idea is good. I'd choose a different color for your base.

-JD-

stsinner · Jan 19, 2009

Prophet said:
The picture is soft. The color is wrong. Idea is good. I'd choose a different color for your base.

-JD-

I kind of liked that it matched the walls.. It's actually a $7 cake tier from Wal Mart... I have what I have... Thanks for the critique...

ShutterSpeed · Jan 19, 2009

man its a tough crowd tonight..

stsinner · Jan 19, 2009

ShutterSpeed said:
man its a tough crowd tonight..

I hear you.. Nobody comments on the Cross pen with the American Flag emblem, which I paid good money for... thought instilled a nice feeling into the thread title idea... Wow.. Just scratches on the plate and bad color..

Maybe if I had a $50k camera my posts would have more clout...

My dad was a stellar car salesman, and he always had his, "Deal pen," which was the pen he used while on a streak.. When the streak cooled, the pen was trashed in favor of a new pen, like the pen had lost its magic.. Those pens determined what we had for dinner in my childhood, so I always hoped he had a good deal pen..

What I tried to impart with this image was how pens can sink an entire country/world with the deals they sign.. It is a very powerful tool/weapon to be wielded.. And I picked a high-dollar Cross pen with an American flag emblem that I purchased at an airport kiosk while traveling just after 9/11, as I think it was our irresponsible mortgage policies that were inked with pens that started the global economy collapse.. Now look at the picture and give an opinion..

ShutterSpeed · Jan 19, 2009

stsinner said:
I hear you.. Nobody comments on the Cross pen with the American Flag emblem, which I paid good money for... thought instilled a nice feeling into the thread title idea... Wow.. Just scratches on the plate and bad color..

Maybe if I had a $50k camera my posts would have more clout...

It's a great pen. I liked your concept. The only thing was that I thought the color wasn't very good on your background. If it had been less - pinkish and more red. It would have matched the flag colors of your pen.

stsinner · Jan 19, 2009

ShutterSpeed said:
It's a great pen. I liked your concept. The only thing was that I thought the color wasn't very good on your background. If it had been less - pinkish and more red. It would have matched the flag colors of your pen.

Please read my edit and edit your response if desired... Thanks..

TheSon · Jan 20, 2009

stsinner said:
What I tried to impart with this image

Obviously we didn't get your meaning because your background is distracting. This is a photo forum, not a pen forum. To me that pen looks like a free giveaway at a baseball game. I use cheap BICs to sign deals.

You could've made a $10 lightbox and had a great looking background, even WITHOUT a $50K camera.

If you had it on a desk, or office... that would've made more of an impact to me than a cake box.

Just giving my honest feedback. Isn't that what were all here for?

Charles89 · Jan 20, 2009

Take it on a black background and its Goodgame !! I really like it. The black background would make it a wonderful subject/shot !

brileyphotog · Jan 20, 2009

If this that is the message you are trying to convey, I would possibly try a shot of a hand holding the pen poised to sign some important looking document. Just an idea...