Unblinking eye

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  1. nealjpage

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    I've never been particularly good at naming artwork, so sorry about the cliche title.

    Scan from black and white print. 8x10 enlargement on Arista glossy paper.

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    Is this ready for critique? Max, what says you?
     
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    I'd love to see the orig
     
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    Thanks, Ily!
     
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    *waits for orig*
     
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    It's hanging on my living room wall. I'll have to make you a copy. ;)
     
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    I like the photo, it has depth, and I'd like to see the print.

    But I'm not so hot on the title. I don't think a title should be so interesting that it takes away from the visual impact of the print.

    That's what the "unblinking eye" does, in this case.

    Also, the "unblinking eye" is a pretty well-known metaphor for a camera lens.

    Why not try a title a little more low-key?
     
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    Thanks, Bobby.

    Someone at work suggested "Seen Better Days," which I don't care for, either. Maybe I should just leave it untitled. It's the headlight from a 1964 Chevy truck I found along the tracks one day. Looking back on it I'm lucky I didn't get plugged with lead for trespassing. There's a lot of mine claims up in them thar parts, and those prospectors get a little edgy! :lol:

    Oh, and I didn't know about the unblinking eye/camera lens thing! I've got that filed away now.
     
  8. nealjpage

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    Any other comments on this one? General are fine. If not, I'm gonna tread lightly in the Critique forum. Never been there before..:blushing:
     
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    i like it but i think a little more of the front clip in the shot woulda looked better. or less of the front so it was more of just the headlight.
     
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    I think there's too much middle gray in this shot. I wish it had more contrast.
     
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    What was your printing workflow?

    Most of the highlights are squarely in zone 7, and the shadows are falling off pretty quickly.
     
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    I like the texture in this one. I bet the print is amazing. The scan seems muddy.

    Love & Bass
     

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