agreed. it seems snapshotty, or at least less powerful than it could be because of the building in the top right of the photo and the legs on the left. those shots are hard though, i'd be lucky just to get it!
hmmm... I really don't mind the building OR the 2nd child. It's all real life... part of the moment. I do wish the lighting was a bit more directional, but oh well.
My opinion is that there are already PLENTY of lines in the composition itself. I would like to see this with with a plain, black frame. I suspect it will help draw the viewer into the photo.