Love the look on her face and your tons look good too.. Would have moved the camera over a bit more to the right and down a little to have her MORE in the photo..
I just modified a bit. Does it look too dark for you? Yeah, I'd like to practice more. I realise there's more than just visualisation. Once it's done, you almost immediately regret somehow.
There's something in her eyes that suprises. She just didn't show emotions, and she's still a kid, I suppose she wasn't faking a particular outlook there. But then, I never experienced a girl's world myself so it continues to puzzle me, you know.