Critique my fill flash please

[Sweetsomedays]

Been working my with my flash a bit. Getting braver with it. Critique the fill please I wasn't going for perfect composition and I know they arent sharp. Did sharpening for web and resize, thats it.
Tips on technique greatly appreciated.
Just took these at 11:10 am

1/200 f/16 Manual ISO 100 flash off to the right

1/200 f/16 Manual ISO 100 flash off to the right

 

[Sw1tchFX]

looks good to me.

 

[Keagle]

Nice! No shadows whatsoever on his face. Goob job