critique please

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  1. Sep 30, 2004 #1
    Mike888

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    nevermind, sorry


     
  2. Oct 1, 2004 #2
    2Stupid2Duck

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    Um... okay. I think the post is a little short. Also, you should have used a full stop between the nevermind and the sorry.

    Apart from that, nice, brief and to the point.
     
  3. Oct 1, 2004 #3
    SirvoN

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    I think "n" should be capitalized. Also there should be a period at the end of the sentence. But I think the placement of the comma really makes the post (rule of thirds).
     
  4. Oct 1, 2004 #4
    jadin

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    If you add some contrast I think it'd really help.
     
  5. Oct 1, 2004 #5
    LaFoto

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    You're all too funny :D

    But to add some critique to this post:

    I had always thought that "Never mind" was two words... ;)
     
  6. Oct 1, 2004 #6
    captain-spanky

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    i always thought 'Nevermind' was Nirvana not sorry?
     
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    Luminosity

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    Corry

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    Ya know...I'm noticing you are just a tad bit odd. You fit so well here! :)
     
  9. Oct 1, 2004 #9
    2Stupid2Duck

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    Why thank you.
     
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    Osmer_Toby

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    i think the color version would be better.
     
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    Machine May

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    Awesome album! I LOVE Nirvana...
     
  12. Oct 1, 2004 #12
    Mike888

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    im so very confused. lol :shock:
     
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