You definitely got the concept!
I agree that the houses are a distraction, but just looking at HDR aspects I'd say it's perfect. From that pic I know how the exposures would have been on a simplex photo - perfect mt. and dark foreground.
Well how cool, my house is in those foot hills next to Mt. Hood! One challange we have here with photographing the mountain is the haze. Most of the time it only goes away when the wind is blowing destabilizing a good steady tripod.
I like the shot but agree that the houses in the foreground detract from the subject that is not as clear as the houses are. Neat attempt and dont take my criticisms to heart since I cant do the HDR yet. Cool subject though and keep em coming.