This photo should have been posted in the Bloopers and Snapshots Gallery. I don't think you want general critical analysis on this nor do I think any can be provided.
There was a point where I was so infatuated with night shots and light trails that I completely ignored the basic notions of photography, such as having a subject that people want to look at, having good composition, all that sort of thing. I think you might be in that stage where stuff looks cool so you sort of ignore that it doesn't look good. Sorry if I hurt your feelings, just don't let your 'Oh cool's stop you from achieving 'Oh awesome's, all right?