I can't give too much advice about the photos because I am a big time newbie.
But I will say that while your model is cute, it is hard to get past the really heavy black eyeliner. I think her eyes (and IMHO the whole photo) would look a million times better if she simply skipped the under eye eyeliner.
I hope that does not sound rude, as it is not intended that way at all. I jut think skipping it would really open her eyes up a lot!
1- I find there is a lack of sharpness / focus in her eyes and mouth which is distracting. Seems that the focus was on her hair.
I'm also not a fan of the pose, I find her head is too twisted back.
2- Much much nicer than the first. The sky is nice, the pose is nicer and the model is in good focus and nice and sharp. I also much prefer the choice of clothes in here as well.
I would of however cut out the back part of the fence as the open field area in the back draws my attention from the model. I love the line of the fence, just not the fact that it ends.
The image also seems slightly dark, probably due to shooting in the shade. Cut out the back open field (which is bright) and then up the exposure / brightness / levels / whatever tickles your fancy to get the image lighter.
Awesome. Thanks guys for all the input. I will try cropping out the end of the fence and upping the exposure/levels and see what I get. I'm thinking about trashing the first one, as I'm starting to not like it at all.
As for the eyeliner, that was all here choice (along with the outfits), so I couldn't just say "take the eyeliner off, it would look better" without sounding rude. :X
But thanks guys for all the input, I'll have to try using a reflector next time and see what I can get.
Ok, I fixed the 2nd picture, does this look any better?