My guess is that you're doing a "problem drinking" series to try to sell as stock? My opinion: the shots are suitably gloomy and the model and poses are good, however I don't believe the set up. I'm not sure why the guy is still in his work clothes if he's home. The background is too distracting. Do you want a drinking scene, or a barbeque scene?
If I had to choose, I think the second shot is the best, because it is the most natural. The other poses are a bit contrived, if more interesting compositionally.
Speaking as an art director who used to spend hours with stock photo books, pages just get flicked as fast as they can be turned. The art director knows what he's looking for before he sees it, so your shot has to be just right. (Of course, all this is probably done on the web, now.)
If you want to keep your model in work clothes, move him indoors, dim light, keep the shot tight. Change the liquor to something a bit more hard core. Keep the glass in his hand, bottle in the background, maybe out of focus so you can't see a brand.
If you want the fence, do a barbeque. The guy's wobbling at the grill, fork in one hand, glass in the other. A couple of young boys, talking to each other, but looking at "Dad". More time consuming to set up, more expensive, but more believable.
IMHO.
Cheers.