A few from a recent session.... C&C appreciated!!

[bremner53]

Hey guys, I haven't been around a whole lot, been pretty busy. Got out last weekend with a friend, she is a pretty fun model Here are a few shots. Please give any C&C you have!!!!


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[reznap]

Hmm.. I want to give c&c but all I can think is "holy crap she's gorgeous"

On #1 and #2, the high perspective feels a bit strange to me. Getting down a little lower (actually sitting, like she is) would have brought you to her level and given a more dramatic separation between her and the background. As far as editing what you have now, I think they'd both be better compositions if you cropped the left sides off to the point where you reach a 6:9 vertical orientation. There's way too much space on the left of #1 and she's too far out of the frame. The eye contact is great though.

I like the compositions of #3 and #4 (the mirror one).

The last photo I'm a little undecided on but I think I like it the least out of this set.

 

[bremner53]

Thanks Reznap.
Yes, very gorgeous, I loved the entire session.

I never thought of cropping the first to be horizontal. Thanks, I really liked the last one, I like how busy it is but the focus is a little off

 

[Brenda Lee]

I like them all. They're clever and she's gorgeous.

 

[Forkie]

Hmm.. I want to give c&c but all I can think is "holy crap she's gorgeous"

This x10!

I agree that the first two look like a bit of an awkward position, having to look up and backward can't be very comfortable. 3 doesn't do a lot for me.

The composition in 4 is great, very mysterious.

5 is the money shot! It's superb! It reminds me of a 1950s shot of a blonde bombshell being whisked away in a car, it has a very Audrey Hepburn/Grace Kelly feel about it. Really very nice. That would be on the first page of my portfolio. It does look very slightly out of focus, but even if that was accidental, I think it would lose some of it's character if it was pin-sharp.

 

[bremner53]

Hmm.. I want to give c&c but all I can think is "holy crap she's gorgeous"

This x10!

I agree that the first two look like a bit of an awkward position, having to look up and backward can't be very comfortable. 3 doesn't do a lot for me.

The composition in 4 is great, very mysterious.

5 is the money shot! It's superb! It reminds me of a 1950s shot of a blonde bombshell being whisked away in a car, it has a very Audrey Hepburn/Grace Kelly feel about it. Really very nice. That would be on the first page of my portfolio. It does look very slightly out of focus, but even if that was accidental, I think it would lose some of it's character if it was pin-sharp.

Thank you I am glad you liked the last one, it is one of my fav's, I just wish it would of been sharper, but maybe you are right and it wouldn't have been the same if it was sharp.

I'll be careful on the posing in the future.

 

[c.cloudwalker]

it has a very Audrey Hepburn/Grace Kelly feel about it.

Grace Kelly? The one who died in a car crash? Bad karma...

Anyway I like the #5 but the focus IS in the wrong place. If it not an accident I'm not getting it.

I would like 3 very much if it wasn't for the oof foreground stuff.

I like #1 as is but #2 makes me feel like falling backwards.

Very good looking model. Take her out for another spin and bring back even better shots.

 

[asheeants]

I'm still quite a noob, but going to give my 2 cents anyway..
Gorgeous model, she has such stunning features def portfolio material.
# 1 is a nice photo, but I'd have to agree with what was mentioned above, if she would have been better framed it would be awesome. Love the way she is posed, almost as if she isn't, very natural..
Love # 2, curious as to how this looks in color?
# 3 The foreground fuzziness is pretty distracting, otherwise a nice shot.
# 4 I really like this one very interesting perspective.
# 5 I just can't make up my mind. Love the way you captured her, even slightly out of focus, but I don't like the way the frame of the car goes through the photo, but then again it I like how it goes across her face so I'm going just going to say "well done". lol

 

[ulrichsd]

Hmm.. I want to give c&c but all I can think is "holy crap she's gorgeous"

On #1 and #2, the high perspective feels a bit strange to me. Getting down a little lower (actually sitting, like she is) would have brought you to her level and given a more dramatic separation between her and the background. As far as editing what you have now, I think they'd both be better compositions if you cropped the left sides off to the point where you reach a 6:9 vertical orientation. There's way too much space on the left of #1 and she's too far out of the frame. The eye contact is great though.

I like the compositions of #3 and #4 (the mirror one).

The last photo I'm a little undecided on but I think I like it the least out of this set.

Ha, I'm completely the opposite of Reznap... I kind of like the top-down angle on 1 and 2. I find the green glare (or out-of-focus leaves) in the center distracting in 3. Same for the white out-of-focus right third of the frame on 4, otherwise its a cool shot. 5 is probably my favorite

 

[KmH]

:er:I don't get why it's considered so cool to edit photos so the people look like they are sick and have jaundice, like #1.

 

[Derrel]

Photos #1 and #2 show us a hauntingly beautiful young woman...set in front of a dead grass background that does absolutely zero to advance the composition or pose; the poses are very weak, and awkward. The dead grass also looks bad with the lens aperture and lens you used; the bokeh of that lens is poor, and in shot #2, the B&W one, the out of focus dead grass appears to almost vibrate, due to the harsh "hashy" bokeh the lens displays at that aperture on that type of material. Looking at #2, if you wwere to just crop out the entire left hand side, all that ugly grass and dead space disappears, and you're left with a pretty face and nice hair.

The last three...eh...none of those do anything for me. She's a fantastic subject, but you need to do a re-shoot to get anything portfolio-worthy.

 

[bremner53]

Thank you for the C &C. I am working pretty hard and focusing on composition and posing.... It is a lot harder then the technical stuff for me. My lens doesn't give me very good bokeh at all, I am saving for a better lens. Right now I have the 28-75mm Tamron 2.8.

I added a few more, including the b&w in color and cropped as previously requested. The first one has the sky completely blown out and I knew that when I shot it, and didn't mind it, I don't find it to distracting, but I am sure a lot of you guys will, but I thought I would show it anyway, mainly for the position critique....
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[Geaux]

I like them all except the last one (of the first set you posted). Some of the older/standard photographers out there won't like your compositional style, but I dig it, it's different and is not what everyone thinks of when they do a portrait session. Shooting from above on the first two work for me, not every shot needs to be from low down, I like it.

 

[radiorickm]

Well, I am not a traditionalist. The pose in #1 (althought not a tradiatioal pose) doesn't bother me. Even the grass in the back ground isn't that bad. But to me the problem is that her face seems to be overexposed to the point that ii appears the same color as the grass (at least on my monitor).

The same thing for #2, the B&W version. Her face is not a grey scale, it appears totally white to me, as in over exposed. Otherwide, it's not bad.

# 3 isn't bad, and if the OOF leaves weren't right in the middle of the picture, they wouldn't bother me either; it's just where they are in the picture.

#4 I like, and it is my favorite. The only suggetstion I would add (in hind sight...lol) is to have gotten more of her face in the mirror and less of the car window.

#5 Is also good. I don't know if the reflection was intentional, and a polarizer might have helped with it a bit.

Overall these are very good

 

[rateeg]

love the exposures and the model.
beautiful.

improve on compositions and outfits maybe.