Hi. Nice effort... Here's my C&C for what it's worth...
Photo number 1 has color and processing issues in my humble hobbyist opinion. I'm assuming that the model's blouse is supposed to be white, so to my eye it appears to be either underexposed, suffering from white balance that is too cool, or both. The photo also seems to be overprocessed... I see a little too much of a boost in contrast, and the overall appearance is unnatural. If you shot in RAW, you could probably fix both issues, as well as the fly-away hairs.
Photo number 2 could've been much nicer, but the overall image seems to have been ruined by camera shake/soft focus.
All that put aside, thanks for sharing, and keep shooting. You seem to have good ideas.