Well, this is the critique forum so here goes (dons flame-proof jacket)...
I think there was a photo there, but to my eyes you didn't quite get it. I would have tried to get in much closer and filled the width of the frame with the bird-bath to loose the distracting background which to my eyes distracts from the theme. I would have gone a bit lower too, and shot more side-on with less of an angle, but still keeping enough angle to see the ripples in the water, in effect bringing the viewer that bit closer to the "action". I also think the finger needed to be smack in the middle of the bird bath to make it work effectively.
Great idea though; I'd never have thought of that! B&W too was an inspiration, as it suits the subject perfectly.