just a tad too lightened i think
you PS'ed those eyes didnt you?
its a good portrait. even if it doesn't follow the rule of thirds
but theres something about the positioning, it just doensn't seem right. theres jsut somethign about it i can't put my finger on.
maybe theres too much dead space on the bottom right, and the fact that the hat is cut off but not the chin
just a side note: i've read, that for women and children, the subject should tilt their heads towards the forward shoulder, a lesser extent on children. this is to create a sense of softness, feminility. and with men, they should slightly, tilt thier heads to their back most shoulder to give a sense of strongness and masculinity