My friend (critique and comments greatly appreciated)

[Bismuthrainbow]

 

[chuasam]

Her expression looks bored, the half open lips is a bit awkward. Pose is odd...not flattering.
Most egregious is the faux DOF done by roughly selecting the background and applying gaussian blur in post.

 

[Bismuthrainbow]

True I understand what youre saying thanks

 

[Designer]

Your model's pose is not ideal (as mentioned above) but your framing is something that you actually have more control over.

Where you placed the bottom edge of the frame is accentuating your model's bustline far more than is necessary. By lowering the bottom edge of the frame to below her bustline, you can include more of her midriff, which will seem more "normal" about how people see her.

So in addition to that, give her more space in front of her, so that her bustline is not crowding the edge of the frame, and since you will be lowering the frame, you will not include so much wasted space over her head.

If you have cropped this image, please post the uncropped version so someone can show you a better crop.

 

[Derrel]

I find her expression sort of sexy,sort of sultry, sort of come-hither, rather than bored. The framing is awkward on this...cutting off the bosom at that point is not a good choice, especially when there isthat much top space (the area above the top of the subject's head). She is "riding low within the frame area", to use an old expression.

There's a visual language associated with this type of basic formal portraiture; I think a re-crop could make this look and feel more-balanced., and a bit close to the standard ideas of how to frame this type of shot of a young woman.

A good point is made above by Designer: the bottom edge of the frame aligning on the bustline itself draws a lot of attention, due to the way the EDGES of the frame have a lot of visual "weight" or "eye-pull"...re-cropping this would improve the shot, although it would have been much closer to ideal to have allowed the bottom edge of the frame to go below the bustline and to the upper midriff area, as Designer mentioned. She has a great figure! And there's a way to emphasize it, subtly and gracefully.

I would try to get a bit more highlight detail in the decolletage area, and would recommend that you try to de-saturate the red lips just a tiny bit. With a re-crop, her placement within the frame area would change,m and would improve/elevate the shot.

 

[chuasam]

I find her expression sort of sexy,sort of sultry, sort of come-hither, rather than bored.

I think that is where I have gone wrong my ENTIRE life