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  1. Lycanimanomaly

    Lycanimanomaly TPF Noob!

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    Hey everybody,
    I've been into photography for the past year 1/2 and everything that I've learned has been self-taught. This'll be my first photo critique and I want you to give me everything you've got. I want to get good enough to become a freelance photographer. So what do you think?

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    I took this with an Olympus D-595 Zoom.
    This is me and my ex.
    We're sitting on a large vine that's naturally endowed with 2 seats. There was a tree on either side of us (you can partially see the tree on the right) and I wanted to get both trees in the shot to frame everything but somehow i failed to get the left one completely.

    Anyway, I'd love some good constructive criticism on this. Thanks!
     
  2. Big Mike

    Big Mike I am Big, I am Mike Staff Member Supporting Member

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    Well the first thing I noticed was that she has a tree growing out of her head.

    I can kind of see how you were trying to frame it with the trees...but I think it would work better if you cropped closer. All the stuff around you isn't adding much so get rid of it.

    It's a little soft and grainy (noisy)...most of which is probably a limitation of the camera.

    I do like the sepia tint you have here, and the whole concept of you two sitting on the vine. It's a nice moment.
     
  3. rmh159

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    Yeah I agree with Big Mike... I think cropping it to be a vertical shot might help clean it up a bit and put the focus of the shot and you and your ex. Not bad though...
     
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    ok i've made the suggested changes.
    I was so comfortable with the original version of this pic that i'm not sure if the changes i've made look right.
    In addition to cropping it i also brightened it a bit.
    Don't know if i can do anything about the noise.
    What do you think about the changes?
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    rmh159 TPF Noob!

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    Personally I like it better just because it draws the focus to you and the girl.
     
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    Thanks alot for your suggestions. you rock. :)
     
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    It's one of those shots that needed soft light to set the mood, but I appreciate you have no control of the light....or do you !!!

    It would also have been better if you got further back, used a longer lens and pulled focus [shot wider aperture] to seperate the subject from the background.
     
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    ok i've given it a soft-focus effect. I'm not sure that the end result is the same as if i had manipulated the actual light before i had taken the picture (as this manipulation is digital) but I think it amplifies the mood a lot more.

    Could you *or anyone* give me an example of what pulled focus looks like?

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  9. Big Mike

    Big Mike I am Big, I am Mike Staff Member Supporting Member

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    I'm not familiar with the term "pulled focus" but I think Philip means that a shallow DOF (Depth of Field) would have helped to accentuate the subjects by blurring the background.
     
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    ok. i see. i think that's all the work i'm going to do on this photo. thank you for your critiques.
     
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    I think if you want strong opinions post this in the 'people photography' forum on www.fredmiranda.com.
     
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    If you were using an SLR with a depth-of-feild preview you could have focused the subjects as close to the end of the range of focus at whatever f/stop you were at and that would have reduced the DOF even MORE!

    What I mean is that if you shoot at say.. f/8, than you'll have about 6 feet worth of depth (probably not, but it's just for the sake of example). If you focus at the end of that 6 feet, you'll have very little depth of field and your subjects will really pop out. however, anythign 6 feet between the subjects and the photogrpaher will be in pretty sharp focus.
     

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