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I mean no disrespect to anyone's ideas here...they are all fun and clever, but I think Bace's is the most interesting. The rest are a bit hackneyed...who hasn't seen or read a story about a drunk, washed up cop (Bruce Willis made a career of playing that part).
Here's my idea, although you seem to well into the story to change things. And I admit that mine is as cliche as the rest
Forget the cop. CSI and SVU has given us a new subgenre of the cop story. Let's make your tragic hero a CSI. So, the photography is naturally a part of the job...he spends the first half of his job taking pictures of scenes to grizly (SP) for most of us to comprehend. As CSIs are not normally in the line of fire (and indeed wait for the cops to do the dangerous part), he is in for a bit of a shock when he opens a closet and finds a gun in his face. As he runs, he's shot (wherever, doesn't matter as long as it's not life threatening), which ends his career because he's in a wheelchair maybe, but whatever, he's wacked now, and not emotionally prepared to deal with work. The crime scene was a particularily hanious (SP) one, and he's haunted by the mutilated body, but pristine face, which of course looks just like--mother?, sister?, wife?, daughter?, girlfirend?, ex?. As he's recovering in hospital, he has nightmares, which is always the same...seeing the images of this girl through the viewfinder of his camera. As part of his therapy, he walks (or wheels if he's wheelchair bound), through town taking pictures. He's trying to--metophorically--rid the camera's buffer of those horrible images with quaint, nice, tranqual pics. I like the idea of having it be a film camera (so nix the buffer, but you get the metaphor) and the dark room scenes. So, one day he's in the dark room developing pics, when he notices stuff in the background of several shots he took at x location. Of course this stuff turns out to be clues to the mutilated chick we saw at the beginning for this story. Oh, yea, and of course since he walked away from his job and the case, it has stalled and gone nowhere. In the end, he figures it out based on the clues from the pics he took.
OK, so I just reread that last part, and it wasn't supposed to be that the "clues" aren't really there. I was actually thinking along the lines of Bace; that he is at the right place at the right time and shoots something, but doesn't realize it until the film is developed and he has a "huh, what's that in the corner of my shot" moment.
BUT...it could also be interesting if the "clues" are there in the dark room, but after the case is solved, no one else sees them...were they really there? Was the dead chick helping him? Was he just that good? Was he really the murderer and it really was the mother?, sister?, wife?, daughter?, girlfirend?, ex?
Anyway, mine is just as trite as the rest of the shlock that Hollywood puts out, but it was fun writing.
Bace...I think we need to write a story together!
Here's my idea, although you seem to well into the story to change things. And I admit that mine is as cliche as the rest
Forget the cop. CSI and SVU has given us a new subgenre of the cop story. Let's make your tragic hero a CSI. So, the photography is naturally a part of the job...he spends the first half of his job taking pictures of scenes to grizly (SP) for most of us to comprehend. As CSIs are not normally in the line of fire (and indeed wait for the cops to do the dangerous part), he is in for a bit of a shock when he opens a closet and finds a gun in his face. As he runs, he's shot (wherever, doesn't matter as long as it's not life threatening), which ends his career because he's in a wheelchair maybe, but whatever, he's wacked now, and not emotionally prepared to deal with work. The crime scene was a particularily hanious (SP) one, and he's haunted by the mutilated body, but pristine face, which of course looks just like--mother?, sister?, wife?, daughter?, girlfirend?, ex?. As he's recovering in hospital, he has nightmares, which is always the same...seeing the images of this girl through the viewfinder of his camera. As part of his therapy, he walks (or wheels if he's wheelchair bound), through town taking pictures. He's trying to--metophorically--rid the camera's buffer of those horrible images with quaint, nice, tranqual pics. I like the idea of having it be a film camera (so nix the buffer, but you get the metaphor) and the dark room scenes. So, one day he's in the dark room developing pics, when he notices stuff in the background of several shots he took at x location. Of course this stuff turns out to be clues to the mutilated chick we saw at the beginning for this story. Oh, yea, and of course since he walked away from his job and the case, it has stalled and gone nowhere. In the end, he figures it out based on the clues from the pics he took.
OK, so I just reread that last part, and it wasn't supposed to be that the "clues" aren't really there. I was actually thinking along the lines of Bace; that he is at the right place at the right time and shoots something, but doesn't realize it until the film is developed and he has a "huh, what's that in the corner of my shot" moment.
BUT...it could also be interesting if the "clues" are there in the dark room, but after the case is solved, no one else sees them...were they really there? Was the dead chick helping him? Was he just that good? Was he really the murderer and it really was the mother?, sister?, wife?, daughter?, girlfirend?, ex?
Anyway, mine is just as trite as the rest of the shlock that Hollywood puts out, but it was fun writing.
Bace...I think we need to write a story together!
Hell, I love it! 
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