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    Hello everyone... you see... I need your help :) :roll: I had to write a book recommendation to my scholl. It is a part of a special project about English/American literature. So... if you'd be so kind and read it, comment, check for grammatical or spelling mistakes I'll be so thankful :)
    so here it goes:
     
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    If it's formal, then I have made suggestions below. If it's not formal, then ignore me. LOL.

     
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    thank you 2Stupid2duck... I have only one question...
    you changed
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    Actually Jack Ryan is a main character of the book, and he had already appeared in previous books of Clancy.
    So... which one is correct?
     
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    oh and I have found one my mistake.. in the last line there should be "for all those who have a free autumn evenings" sorry :)
     
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    LOL. Well that proves it was able to be interpretted a few ways.

    Try "Another of Clancy's novels featuring Jack Ryan as the main character."

    But mate - it's not a matter of correctness. It is a case of tailoring your writing to your audiance. That's why I prefaced my remarks with the comment about whether it was formal or not. Another example is that I didn't get what you meant about Jack Ryan because I have never read any clancy. If you are writing for Clancy fans then they would know that.

    Oh.. and my pleasure. I like to help.
     
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    And actually, I like to write. If you are bored and desperate, let me know and I will post a link to my fictional book that I wrote and posted to the net for people's enjoyment (I hope).
     
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    wow... of course I'm interested in your book... can I have a link?
     
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    Excellent! Two minor misspellings, easily corrected and you're rocking! Don't forget the final period. :wink: :D
     
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    WHICH FINAL PERIOD? Do I have to write something more here?!?!?1
     
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    :lol: :lol:

    Sorry for the confusion I created! I was talking about the "." at the end of your last sentence.

    :lol: :lol:
     
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    uhhhh thakfully :)
     

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