Both the story and the technical execution are good, but IMO the lamp on the right is too big and bright and draws too much attention. I want the scene in the window to be bigger and more prominent. I'd crop almost all of the lamp, leaving just part of the pane on the left to show where the light comes from. This would leave part of the left cross-piece as a sort of pointer. I might also crop a bit off the bottom so it didn't end up being as far from square as it would be otherwise. Just my two cents ...